that's soooo beautiful. Oh ya... happy face:

*sniff*sniff* I feel luvved. ^_^

another +fav for you!

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NOOOOOOOO IT'S TOO GOOD!!

Why isn't Jiko snatching you up yet??

I love it, hon!! I'm gonna it!! I love you!!

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this is so sweet!! it made me happier, so thank youuuu. ^_^ i'm faving thiss

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Well then I guess I'm happy that I made you happy!

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It's a sweet little poem. I like the rhyming meter you used, since it fit the poem well.

I think you could put commas between 'cry' and 'my' every time. Both ways of grammar are accepted, but I think in this poem, the comma would make sense, since when I read it aloud, I paused. But you should see how you would read it and then make a decision. Nicely done!

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Nein.

Thanks for the commentary, but I generally try to stay away from punctuations. Poetry isn't meant to have a specific meaning, even when it's writ'n for a specific purpose. The true beauty of poetry is pausing whenever you see fit and interpretting however you see fit as the reader, not being dictated by the writer. So now you have to ask yourself, did you translate the poem the way that I meant it to be translated? Did you really pause in the right places? The answer is that there is no answer, but thinking about it hopefully brought you a little closer to understanding yourself via the text that I have left behind. You choose your own path in life, no one else can do it for you. ^_~

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True. I've always been a bit obsessed with grammar, but in poetry, it doesn't matter as much. Sometimes I forget that. Thanks for reminding me. You did a good job.

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Nein.

wow , this is very very good

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